Talk:Yukio Mishima

Japanese Wikipedia wikilinks and {{nihongo}}

The sheer amount of {{nihongo}} and Japanese Wikipedia wikilinks confuses me, particularly when the English-language article is linked already. For example, in the lead, it links Confessions of a Mask (仮面の告白, Kamen no kokuhaku) (and repeats this twice for two of his other novels). There's already a wikilink to its English-language article, and I don't see how having the Japanese Wikipedia wikilink or {{nihongo}} helps the reader in any way. (Sometimes, in the rest of the article, I see the purpose of {{nihongo}}, but not here.) Yukio Mishima's own Japanese Wikipedia is linked in his Early life section, which made me giggle. I am going to be bold and remove some of the particularly tacky ones, but wanted to post here and ask why they were included in the first place. ayakanaa ( t · c ) 17:21, 22 April 2024 (UTC)

Please understand that this article is the cumulative result of a multitude of editors over many years, none of whom may have coordinated their work with others. Many of these editors may no longer be invested in this article or even participate in Wikipedia. So feel free to do what you feel you have to do. The worst that can happen is that somebody else will disagree. —CurryTime7-24 (talk) 19:15, 23 April 2024 (UTC)

Understood, thank you for taking the time to reply. ayakanaa ( t · c ) 20:34, 23 April 2024 (UTC)

Coup-attempt split

I feel like the coup attempt part should be split and expanded as its own article. It is a GA in Japanese Wikipedia. The current information alone is enough for at least a start class article, and with the information and refs available on the Japanese version I believe an article about it can be of very high quality. A person with a better understanding of Japanese than I may want to take a look. Zinderboff(talk) 06:58, 9 August 2024 (UTC)

Hi,Zinderboff. I am the person who edited most of the articles on 三島事件 ("The Mishima Incident"). I am not very good at English, but I understand the entire contents of this article, so I have been thinking for a while about trying to create an English version using a translation app.

In order to avoid mistranslations, I will convert the original Japanese into simple sentences, convert old kana spellings (Historical kana orthography) into modern kana spellings (Modern kana usage), etc. (Mishima insisted on writing his novels and essays in old kana spelling, and there are other writers who do the same), and it will be a meticulous task, so I am thinking of first creating an entry in the form of a shortened version, and then gradually adding the necessary sections. I will post the translation on my sandbox page, and I would be happy if you could review the English grammar mistakes and strange terminology. Once the translation has progressed to a certain extent, I would like to announce it here.

Right now, I am trying to create an entry for a work of Shūsaku Endō in the Japanese version, and in parallel with that, I will proceed with the English translation of the Mishima Incident, so I don't know when I will be able to do it, but I will try to do it little by little. Thank you.

みしまるもも (talk) 01:49, 10 August 2024 (UTC)

Wow, thank you so much for the work you put in! I will definitely take a look, although to note I'm not the greatest at English either. Zinderboff(talk) 05:21, 10 August 2024 (UTC)

Oh, you're from China. I love Jet Li so, and I also like Kung fu films, and Hong Kong movies starring Chow Yun-fat. I also admire director John Woo. I'll let you know when I've finished drafting the article on the Mishima incident, so please look forward to it. It's Obon (visiting graves and ancestral worship) season now, so I'm planning to start working on it a little later. みしまるもも (talk) 05:47, 11 August 2024 (UTC)

Of course, take your time! I find Japanese culture extremely fascinating. It is sad I can only really read Kanji and attempts to learn Hiragana and Katagana before ended in failure. I would love to come visit again some day, the last time I went I had a fantastic time! Thank you again for your contributions! Zinderboff(talk) 22:19, 11 August 2024 (UTC)

I have linked my sandbox page on my talk page, I'll also link here. →"User:みしまるもも/sandbox" Thank you. --みしまるもも (talk) 07:44, 23 September 2024 (UTC)

I have cleaned up the "coup attempt and ritual suicide" section, which was getting very long and repetitive, and had lots of extra detail that was not necessary for a long article on Mishima's entire life. I agree that there is much more to say about the Mishima Incident, but the more minor details should go into a separate article entirely about the Mishima Incident, as per WP:SPLIT, with only the most important aspects summarized here, especially as this article is already over 9,000 words long (getting very close to too long). I'm very much looking forward to seeing みしまるもも's planned article on the Mishima Incident! --Ash-Gaar (talk) 15:29, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

WP:VOICE and WP:SYNTH concerns in lead

Yesterday, I cut a paragraph in the lead because it misrepresented and possibly synthesized opinions as statements of fact. Neither are acceptable according to WP:VOICE and WP:SYNTH. Mishimarumomo reverted me shortly thereafter. I did not reply in kind, partly because I don't want them to get the wrong idea about their edits in general, which have been helpful and welcome.

The passage in question:

Mishima's age corresponds exactly to the number of years in the postwar Shōwa era, and the milestones and achievements of his life coincide with the historical events of Japan's rise and fall during the second period of the Shōwa era. As a result, he is often spoken of in Japan as a man who shared his life with the "Shōwa" and sharply shed light on the problems of that era.

If this paragraph were reworded so as to make clear to whom this subjective appraisal ought to be attributed it could be reincluded in the article. —CurryTime7-24 (talk) 18:05, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

"Mishima's age corresponds exactly to the number of years in the postwar Shōwa era" - this is just plainly false, as we have pointed out. User みしまるもも's defense that even though the Shōwa era did not end until 1989, this statement is still somehow true because "hardly any major historical events happened in Japan after 1970" is a completely untenable expression of personal opinion that no credible secondary source is going to be able to adequately support. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 18:57, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

I actually think it might make sense to add some sort of short graf about Mishima's legacy at the end of the lede, but it definitely should not be couched in terms of "Shōwa era," a term which hardly any English speakers will understand and which only makes sense to native Japanese speakers and scholarly specialists. This is *especially* true in the lede, which needs to be readily comprehensible to a broad audience. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 19:02, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

A consistent issue with a portion of みしまるもも's edits to this page is that they want to try to replicate the Japanese wiki page exactly, without doing adequate work to translate Japanese sentences into clear English prose and modify concepts and themes to better suit an English-language audience. I agree that these edits are in good faith, but the constant edit warring grows tiresome. In the past みしまるもも would not stop edit warring unless I personally translated every Japanese sentence on the talk page, which I did for a while, but could not do forever. Writing in clear, fully translated English should be on the user making the edit, not on the person (or persons) reverting incomprehensible or inaccurate prose. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 19:06, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

As long as the statement is directly quoted and attributed to a particular author or authors, then it's fine. It would be very helpful if Mishimarumomo could provide a direct quote in Japanese, so those of us who know the language can translate for the article or at least understand the context of this opinion. (I think I have the Matsumoto book buried somewhere in my personal library; been looking for it since last night.) Otherwise, I agree that it's best to leave it out if the WP:VOICE and WP:SYNTH problems can't be resolved. —CurryTime7-24 (talk) 19:32, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

Sure, I agree. But again, even if properly cited, I don't think there should be elaborate metaphors about the Shōwa era in the lede. The body might be okay if done well. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 19:34, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

Also, as mentioned, I don't want to go back to the situation where みしまるもも threatens to edit war unless we translate all their Japanese prose for them. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 19:36, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

I actually looked at the JaWiki page, and the statement is equally inaccurate and vague in Japanese as far as I can tell: 「満年齢と昭和の年数が一致し、」 --Ash-Gaar (talk) 19:39, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

I apologize for not being able to speak English as fluently as native speakers. However, it is true that Mishima's age is the same as the year number of the Shōwa era, and it is not a lie. For example, the year 1941 (Shōwa 16) was when Mishima was 16 years old. Also, the content I edited is the usual understanding in Japanese biographies of Mishima, so please understand that I did not edit it with any malicious intent to confuse people in English-speaking countries. Maybe I should have just written the "year number".

Mishima's age corresponds exactly to the year number of the Shōwa era,

Also, the term "満年齢" is difficult for people outside of Japan and China to understand. It means normal age. It is a term used to distinguish it from "数え年 (East Asian age reckoning." --みしまるもも (talk) 00:16, 16 October 2024 (UTC)

Okay, I see what you meant now! Thank you for the explanation. But that was different from what was originally stated. I would still oppose putting this in the lead, as it is very confusing to explain for non-Japanese speakers, but it might work in the "Legacy" section, especially if more explicitly attributed to someone other than the article's own authorial voice. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 01:11, 16 October 2024 (UTC)

It's tricky because 年数 can also mean "total number of years" which was probably what was throwing off your English translation --Ash-Gaar (talk) 01:13, 16 October 2024 (UTC)

WP:VOICE issues

In making extensive copy edits today for English-language readability issues, I encountered numerous instances where Mishima's opinions were phrased in a way as if they were factual statements or obvious points, rather than merely Mishima's personal opinions. For example, saying Mishima "pointed out" instead of Mishima "argued" or "believed." Since this is an encyclopedia article, please be careful to always use NPOV language and make clear that opinions are opinions, even if you personally agree with Mishima's views. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 05:14, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

In the Japanese version, the word "pointing out" (指摘) does not have such a strong meaning that it should be banned, and it is often used in many articles, but I will be careful in the English version. Thank you for letting me know. --みしまるもも (talk) 05:51, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

Yes, in English, "pointed out" means that you completely agree with the statement. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 05:58, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

I accept the use of such language, but frankly, it makes me a little sad that it seems as Mr. Ash-Gaar has deleted parts of Mishima's argument that you personally dislike.--みしまるもも (talk) 06:40, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

I strongly resent this comment. All of my edits are in good faith and you have no idea my own views are. As I have carefully detailed in my edit summaries, I have only deleted quotations where the English translation is extremely garbled as to be incomprehensible, quotations that are excessive or repetitive in an already long article, or quotations that are simply inaccurate. All of my edits are squarely aimed at improving this article in terms of comprehensibility, readabilty, and accuracy, and it's undeniable that I have done a huge amount of work to expand this article and make it as good as it can be. I always assume good faith on your part (WP:AGF) - even if I sometimes get a bit frustrated with your occasionally excessive zeal about Mishima, you have obviously done amazing work on this article, and I always assume you are trying your best to help Wikipedia. You should do the same for me. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 14:14, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

With regard to the most recent quotation at issue, I had no intention of deleting it, and indeed had made copy edits on it several times, clearly showing my intention to keep it. I only deleted it when I went and looked up the original English article Mishima wrote and found that you were completely mischaracterizing Mishima's view to make it sound like he was more strongly against leftists than he really was, rendering your original paragraph highly inaccurate. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 14:15, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

I have now replaced that paragraph with a more accurate paragraph, that also improves article flow by helping to explain why Mishima was so excited to debate the Todai Zenkyōtō students, and why he was so disappointed in them afterwards. --Ash-Gaar (talk) 15:44, 17 October 2024 (UTC)